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Restless Leg Syndrome by ~NobodysSavior:iconNobodysSavior:

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Restless Leg Syndrome

I know when it's coming
When the monster inside me starts to hiss and spit
The way it weaves through my muscles, tightening
In vain I try to deny it

But the creature doesn't take no for an answer
And I fight a loosing war
Held in its claws if I move, torn apart by them if I don't
And I run as the vile thing pushes me too far

I can hear it laughing, a vile sound
As it chases me, this evil thing
But though I hurt and ache, I am stronger than it
And this is a battle I can win

It runs, but I am faster
It roars, not wanting to loose its prey
But I push myself harder
And force the monster away

I finally rest, the beast gone
Exhausted, I let sleep begin
Freed of the tightening, freed of the thrashing,
At least until the monster wakes again
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Author's Comments

The second personification poem I wrote for creative writing class. This is probably the best one out of the three, it has the most emotion and intensity, probably because I had just had a severe attack of RLS before I wrote it.

For those of you that are wondering why it seems like I'm talking about my whole body when the condition is called Restless LEG Syndrome, I'll explain. They call it Restless Legs because it most often occurs in the legs, but it CAN happen to any group of muscles. I happen to have an extremely intense case of it where I get it in my entire body, and occaisionally I have episodes so strong that it hurts. So I'm not personifying RLS in general, but my own case of RLS.

I know this one's sorta dark, but I'm quite proud of it. Tell me whatcha think!

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*HeavensChaos Apr 4, 2009, 5:59:29 PM
I think its very nice, and I can definitely relate. I've never had such a severe case of RLS but your piece really gives a great idea of what its like!

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~NobodysSavior Apr 7, 2009, 12:14:24 PM
Yeah my RLS is crazy out of control. But I'm glad someone else with it thinks I did a good job of describing it ^^ Thanks

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*HeavensChaos Apr 7, 2009, 1:15:13 PM
You're welcome, its such a nice piece!

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The journey of a thousand miles begins with one 22 1/2 inch step, left foot first.

"Wouldn't it be great if wars could be fought just by the assholes who started them?" ~ The Postman
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~OmegaWarmech Jul 20, 2009, 4:04:51 PM
I really like this. It really conveys the message about how such a severe case of RLS is horrible.

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~NobodysSavior Sep 11, 2009, 4:37:05 AM
Thanks. A lot of people think RLS is just a sort of annoyance, but it can get painful if the case is bad enough

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